Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 19 - July 5, 2022
Posted: July 5th, 2022, 5:07 am
by peachy123uk
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that's very good i like that
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 19 - July 5, 2022
Posted: July 8th, 2022, 2:24 pm
by ciyrose
All right, so finally getting around to reading your story! I make not promises that I will keep up with it well, but you are in my list now.
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Prelude/Chapter 1: Alexandra is a cutie! I love the color-coordinated aliens! What fun. lol I laughed at the lemon, that was great. Oh yay, Johnny! He was my very first TS4 spouse. YAY, she gets to move in with Johnny! She better be careful with Don though!
Chapter 2: Oh boy, this is a chapter that is not going well with Alex so far is it? lol Oh dear, that wedding was a complete disaster. Kind of fun to have a broken engagement though. I've never actually done that in-game.
Chapter 3: Oh welcome to the mess Brielle. Oooh, it's nice that mod gives some difference to the pregnancy announcement. I get tired of the pout every time. Awww, Don is being such a good daddy!
Well that has been super fun so far, I'll be back to read more later!
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 20 - July 11, 2022
I would love feedback - is it too spicy? Or can it handle more drama?
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 21 - July 13, 2022
Posted: July 12th, 2022, 11:01 pm
by peachy123uk
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i think it is spicy enough but that's just me. This is a great story line. Can't wait for me
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 21 - July 13, 2022
Posted: July 14th, 2022, 11:59 am
by ciyrose
Ok, time to get back to this and see how Alex is doing.
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Chapter 4: Yay for both Don and Johnny being good dad's to their kids! OH MY GOODNESS, Cora is SO cute! Don is looking quite buff there in the dance picture. Happy Birthday Bree! What a fun update!
Chapter 5: Hehe, the title of this one made me giggle! Good on Don for telling Dina all that stuff. Johnny might not be good in a relationship, but it doesn't mean he's cheating on her with Alex. WOAH, didn't see the proposal coming!
Chapter 6: Oh dear Dina, what are you up to. HAHA, no reason for that pic huh? lol Oh dear, poor Brie, she gets lots of love, but I'm sure it's hard for her to have all the feelings she has. Cora is SO cute. She's the perfect mix of Alex and Don, I adore her! I have never used/seen that lamp. That is AWESOME! Oh good job Alex getting Dina to see what she's doing to Brie!
Chapter 7: Awww, Noodles! Such a pretty kitty, and she looks so skinny. What a pretty wedding! You did great, and I love all the reactions to weddings now. It's too funny.
All right, that is where I need to end for now, but great updates. I will get caught up eventually, I hope!
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 22 - July 21, 2022
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 23 - July 23, 2022
Posted: July 24th, 2022, 4:17 pm
by ciyrose
Ok, I won't be able to catch up super quickly, but gotta get through some more.
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Chapter 8: That unicorn cake is SO CUTE! Brie is really a pretty girl, a good mix of her parents I think. I love these girls, they are so different, but so cute. Oh I can imagine Don is imaging all the boys he has to teach his daughters about. lol
Chapter 9: It's cute that the Brooke twins are friends with Brie. It's cool how Brie is the more social of the girls. Poor Cora, she is burning the candles at both ends. Don has had a pretty busy day. Awww, I like Aidan. It is nice for Cora to have someone to talk with. Oh man, Alex and Don are getting older, it's always a bit sad.
Chapter 10: LOL....Cora is awesome. I love Cora. Oh dear, Layla is bringing out Cora's jealous side. Well guess Layla and Zane might be a thing, poor Aiden. Oooh, finally Cora asks Aiden. Poor Aiden, Cora really doesn't handle other people very well. YAY for Brie! She's so pretty.
Chapter 11: Their trailer is cute. Too bad things are not going great for these two. They aren't great communicators. Oh boy, the drama at work. Poor Aiden, doesn't have the courage to ask her yet. I hope things go ok for them, but I get the feeling it's not going to go well.
Chapter 12: Oh boy, already starting off on an iffy note. Just as things were looking pretty decent with Cora and Aiden. Hmmmm, yeah that wasn't good of Layla to do, but I also kind of think Zane should have told her when she thought they had the scare in college. (Maybe you forgot you had done that in the story. ) Aww, I love that Cora knew about the ring and had been waiting for Aiden to get the guts to ask. Oh boy, aliens have come! lol
Chapter 13: Oh dear, 7 months???? Poor Aiden! Oh dear, even more poor Aiden....Cora is moving on to Andeux. This is going to cause a lot of drama for sure. Oh dear, and not a pregnancy...and she still can't be sure she's going home.
Oh my I have to stop, but I really did want to keep going. What a fun story so far!
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 23 - July 23, 2022
Chapter 12: Oh boy, already starting off on an iffy note. Just as things were looking pretty decent with Cora and Aiden. Hmmmm, yeah that wasn't good of Layla to do, but I also kind of think Zane should have told her when she thought they had the scare in college. (Maybe you forgot you had done that in the story. ) Aww, I love that Cora knew about the ring and had been waiting for Aiden to get the guts to ask. Oh boy, aliens have come! lol
I'm loving all your feedback, thank you!
Spoiler:
About Chapter 12: Vasectomies can fail, especially in the first year after getting one. It's rare but possible. So in my head, Zane had gotten the vasectomy shortly before going to university, and was actually worried that Layla had gotten pregnant anyway - and he definitely should have told her about it back then, but he was young and dumb and didn't want to have that conversation, because in his head it shouldn't make a difference
But yeah, it could be clearer - this is my first time writing, but I'm hopefully improving as the chapters move along - I didn't even start using poses until chapter 11
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 23 - July 23, 2022
Posted: July 25th, 2022, 6:56 pm
by ciyrose
SirianaSims wrote: ↑July 24th, 2022, 4:51 pm
I'm loving all your feedback, thank you!
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About Chapter 12: Vasectomies can fail, especially in the first year after getting one. It's rare but possible. So in my head, Zane had gotten the vasectomy shortly before going to university, and was actually worried that Layla had gotten pregnant anyway - and he definitely should have told her about it back then, but he was young and dumb and didn't want to have that conversation, because in his head it shouldn't make a difference
But yeah, it could be clearer - this is my first time writing, but I'm hopefully improving as the chapters move along - I didn't even start using poses until chapter 11
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That makes so much sense! Since I've never used that particular mod I didn't know that was a possibility. Your writing has been just fine, and really, if I wasn't binge reading I probably wouldn't have even remembered it!
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 23 - July 23, 2022
Posted: July 25th, 2022, 9:57 pm
by peachy123uk
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tell her the truth it is never good to be in a unhappy relationship
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 24 - July 28, 2022
Posted: July 28th, 2022, 9:08 am
by SirianaSims
Chapter 24: Just Give Me a Reason is out!
It's the biggest chapter yet because I needed to hit my SimNaNoWriMo goals, so settle in, it's gonna be a wild ride.
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 24 - July 28, 2022
Posted: July 28th, 2022, 11:26 am
by peachy123uk
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oh dear, hopefully she will leave her daughter behind
Re: The Duchelli Legacy - Chapter 24 - July 28, 2022